[help] Minimal proofreading, deferring some reviews to after 2.28.0

1 files changed, 16 insertions, 13 deletions

diff --git a/help/C/geolocation-what-is.page b/help/C/geolocation-what-is.page
index 77fcff8dd..2e8163bf2 100644
--- a/help/C/geolocation-what-is.page
+++ b/help/C/geolocation-what-is.page
@@ -1,6 +1,7 @@
 <page xmlns="http://projectmallard.org/1.0/"
-  type="topic"
-  id="geolocation-what-is">
+      xmlns:e="http://projectmallard.org/experimental/"
+      type="topic"
+      id="geolocation-what-is">
 
   <info>
     <link type="guide" xref="geolocation#geoloc"/>
@@ -8,7 +9,11 @@
     <desc>
       Understanding geolocation.
     </desc>
-    <revision pkgversion="2.28" version="0.1" date="2009-08-19" status="review"/>
+    <revision pkgversion="2.28" version="0.1" date="2009-08-19" status="review">
+      <!--
+      <e:review by="shaunm@gnome.org" date="2009-09-09" status="deferred"/>
+      -->
+    </revision>
     <credit type="author">
       <name>Milo Casagrande</name>
       <email>milo@ubuntu.com</email>
@@ -22,36 +27,34 @@
 
   <title>What is geolocation</title>
 
-  <p>
-    With <em>geolocation</em> it is intended the possibility to identify the real
-    geographical position of a computer or a device connected to the Internet.
-  </p>
+  <p>Geolocation allows you to identify the real geographical location of a
+  computer or a device connected to the Internet.</p>
   <p>
     With geolocation in <app>Empathy</app> you can:
   </p>
   <list>
     <item>
       <p>
-        Publish your geographical position to your contacts.
+        Publish your geographical location to your contacts.
       </p>
     </item>
     <item>
       <p>
-        See your contacts geographical position and quickly contact them.
+        See your contacts’ geographical location and quickly contact them.
       </p>
     </item>
     <item>
       <p>
-        Set the accuracy of your position and the device used to discover your
-        position.
+        Set the accuracy of your location and the device used to discover your
+        location.
       </p>
     </item>
   </list>
 
   <note style="tip">
     <p>
-      In order to see your contacts geographical position, they need to use a
-      service and an application that support geolocation.
+      In order to see your contacts’ geographical locations, they need to use a
+      service and an application that supports geolocation.
     </p>
   </note>